Thursday, February 4, 2010

Page 69 Trial

Howdy all! :) I'm returning us to our regularly scheduled writing programming.

Today, we're doing the page 69 trial.

Get your minds out of the gutter, folks! I learned about this from a writer friend of mine. She said that there is a test to know if a book will be a good read or not, and that is to crack it open to page 69 & read it. If page 69 bores you, the book is no good. If it's interesting, then you've got a gem! :)

So, with that in mind, I'm giving you page 69 of Unbreakable Hostage. Now, this is page 69 from the e-book version. The print should be pretty darn close if not exact, so this should work all around! ;)

Lareina tried to appease Tony, but she seemed to be failing miserably.

“Harder! Scrub them harder, damn it! Get these fucking clothes clean!”

Lareina hand washed and scrubbed the clothes with what little energy she had, but it was not enough for Tony. He came up from behind her, grabbed the clothes out of her hands, and threw them onto the river bank.

Tony then grabbed her hair and shoved her face under the bitterly cold water.

Lareina began to struggle. Tony held her face down longer, and with greater force. Lareina was running out of air. Just as she began to fear that she was going to drown, Tony pulled her head up with great strength. Lareina gasped for breath, and Tony shoved her face back down into the cold abyss.

Again, she struggled. She moved and tried to loosen Tony's grip on her hair, but it was to no avail. She began to run out of air again. Once more, Tony pulled her head up just in time.

Lareina took in the biggest breath she could as her face was forced into the cold water yet again. This time, she did not struggle in the hopes that it would have her air supply last longer. The cold water harshly pierced her face as she tried to hold her breath for as long as possible. Finally, after a cold eternity Tony pulled her up again. Lareina fought to breathe normally again. Tony pulled back on her hair, and Lareina stumbled backwards in the water. It took her a few moments, but she finally regained her stability.

“Now you see what I'm truly capable of. Don't you dare ever make me do this again! I don’t want to, but I'm not afraid to do whatever I have to.” His hot breath fell on her ear. “I don't think you really understand what's going on here. You will do as I say, or I will kill you. There are no two ways about it. Get it?

“You will also never get away from me. Don't even think about it. If I can't have you, no one can. You belong to me, and you always will. Is that clear?”

With the little slack she had from his grasp on her hair, Lareina nodded her head yes.

“Good. Now go grab the clothes. They have dirt on them again. Clean them, and this time clean them well.”

Still struggling to catch her breath and trying to slow her racing heart, Lareina walked up to retrieve the clothes. As she walked forward, she noticed an especially large, unique looking tree behind the cabin that could easily be seen from a hiking path. Somehow, she would have to use that tree to her advantage.

Keeping her newly discovered treasure a secret, Lareina picked up the clothes and re-entered the bitingly cold lake to do as she had been told.

Hope you all liked it! If you do, don't forget that you can download it on

It's also available for your Kindle on

Print version is coming this month!!!! :)

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