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This post is part of an ongoing blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Every Sunday, participating authors post eight sentences from a published work or even a WIP (work in progress). Then we hop to our fellow warriors’ blogs and check out all the fabulous fiction that’s happening! It's a great way to meet readers, writers, and your next favorite book! :)
Today, we are going to continue with The Cop, Donna's story in the Loving Her series.
Donna White is one tough cop. Behind the badge, though, is a very sweet, sad, sensitive soul. Truly a woman alone, Donna is simply trying to navigate her way through life. Who is Donna? She is dedicated, determined, distinctive and deep. Donna’s rich and touching story is second in the Loving Her series.
Background on this snippet: Donna and Kirkpatrick have come upon an armed robbery in progress. They join up with several other cops. One police officer has found a way to get the group of robbers from behind, without being noticed. We are in the middle of a very tense, very scary stand-off.
He suddenly leaped forward, pushing the thief to the ground face down. He grabbed one of the thief’s arms and pulled it behind his back. As he did so, Donna raced forward with her gun aimed at one of the other thieves.
Suddenly, Donna felt an incredible pain in her back. She felt as though a great force pushing her forward. All the air escaped her lungs. Her eyes rolled up towards the sky as she lost all control of her body. She felt her body slam against the concrete in a tremendous impact before blackness enveloped her.
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5 comments:
Very believable scenario, and scary. Good snippet. The only change I would suggest is WITH a tremendous impact instead of IN.
Well done. You captured a frightening moment and made it so intense.
Oh wow, dramatic. I was reading along, admiring how well you were describing the action scene and now I'm terrified for your heroine! Great snippet...
Great snippet. Really powerful in that I was drawn into what it would be like to down in such shock.
Oh, no! Sounds like she was shot. I hope she was wearing a vest...
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