Saturday, August 15, 2015

More hot August WeWriWa action from The Cop

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This post is part of an ongoing blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Every Sunday, participating authors post eight sentences from a published work or even a WIP (work in progress). Then we hop to our fellow warriors’ blogs and check out all the fabulous fiction that’s happening! It's a great way to meet readers, writers, and your next favorite book!  :)

Things are heating up in August! So for this month, we're looking at the scorching hot Donna from the Loving Her series.

Donna White is one tough cop. Behind the badge, though, is a very sweet, sad, sensitive soul. Truly a woman alone, Donna is simply trying to navigate her way through life. Who is Donna? She is dedicated, determined, distinctive and deep. Donna’s rich and touching story is second in the Loving Her series. 

Background on the snippet: Donna has been called to a robbery in progress. She and many other officers are present. There are multiple thieves. Across the way from her, one officer is sneaking over to capture one of them. Donna has her gun aimed and ready for one of the others. This snippet has been edited to fit 8 sentences.

      Inch by tiny inch, he moved his way closer...slowly and silently he moved until he knew he was in the right place. He suddenly leaped forward, pushing the thief to the ground face down. He grabbed one of the thief’s arms and pulled it behind his back. As he did so, Donna raced forward with her gun aimed at one of the other thieves.
     Suddenly, Donna felt an incredible pain in her back. She felt as though a great force pushing her forward. All the air escaped her lungs. Her eyes rolled up towards the sky as she lost all control of her body. She felt her body slam against the concrete in a tremendous impact before blackness enveloped her.

Hope you liked it!
Happy reading!


Ed Hoornaert said...

Uh oh. I liked how you showed the sensations of getting shot, rather than merely telling us.

Chelle Cordero said...

It's a good thing I know this is a romance with Donna as one of the main characters (please say it is an HEA). This scene was entirely too frightening. Well done.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Powerful snippet, Lauren. I love the way it builds and POW! she's in deep trouble.

Veronica Scott said...

Wow, intense! Very well written and dramatic snippet.

Lauren Shiro said...

Thanks! I always aim to get the readers right in the midst of things. I described it based on what I would assume being shot feels like. Having never been shot, it was my best guess. :)

I could tell you, but wouldn't that be a spolier? ;) Thank you. I will tell you that there is more to Donna's story than just this. ;)


Thank you very much!

Caitlin Stern said...

Yikes! Sounds like she missed someone... someone who was armed. Hopefully she recovers quickly!