Saturday, October 25, 2014

Another WeWriWa from Pianissimo

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This post is part of an ongoing blog hop hosted by Weekend Writing Warriors. Every Sunday, participating authors post eight sentences from a published work or even a WIP (work in progress). Then we hop to our fellow warriors’ blogs and check out all the fabulous fiction that’s happening! It's a great way to meet readers, writers, and your next favorite book!  :)

This week's WeWri Wa is more than 8 sentences (for flow and closure). This is from my upcoming release, Pianissimo.

Corinne walked briskly back into the house. As she came in, she felt drawn to the inside basement door. Corinne went to slide back the lock, but it was so hot, it singed her hand.  Corinne immediately removed her hand from the door. She looked at her palm which was blazing red. She blew gently on it to try to ease the scorch. The crying was clearer now.

Braving the lock once again, Corinne quickly undid the latch. She pushed the door open with all her might. The darkness rose up the stairs like billowing clouds of smoke. There it was.  The crying was clear and loud now. A woman wept down in the dark, dank basement.

Darryl and Corinne Richards purchase their first house. With Darryl’s army career coming to a close, they feel ready to settle down in Louisville, Kentucky. With impeccable timing, Darryl is sent on one final tour, leaving Corinne to live in this new house and new city alone.

Overwhelmed, Corinne becomes reclusive, living a quiet, boring life with her cats as she adjusts to her new surroundings. The problem is: someone or some thing does not want her life to be either quiet or boring. And then there’s the creepy piano in the basement…

There is more to that creepy, dilapidated piano and her new home than Corinne could ever imagine. Through highs and lows, twists and turns, she begins to understand that even the most softly played music is powerful – and that even soft realizations and quietly subtle changes can have a profound effect.

So much to enjoy!
reviewed by Shay Norgaard-Melton

This review is from a gifted ebook reviewer copy.

“The stories flow together so beautifully, I felt transported back in time to peek into Agnes and Margaret’s deep and abiding love for each other, and back to the present day to be with Corinne as she investigated the house she and her military husband bought just before he shipped out for his last tour of duty. Exciting and wondrous exploration of a time and situation, written with grace and delightful style.”


Anonymous said...

A lot of tension in this snippet. Well done.

Chelle Cordero said...

With the lock being so hot and her palm so red, I thought that there might have been flames on the other side of the door. Scary stuff!

Linda said...

So spooky! What is that woman doing in the basement? Of all places it doesn't sound like the most engaging one.

Catherine Winther said...

Interesting - for some reason I find this snippet very haunting. Beautiful.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Scary yet a thrill went through me. The thought of a ghost in the house or maybe a girl trapped. To Be Read. I plan to order this book. Thanks, Lauren.

Cindy Amrhein said...

Ah well, we all face the 8 sentence rule every week. With a bit of tightening in the prose it can be done or just your first paragraph would have worked as a snippet. That's me as a mod responding.

Anyway, sounds like Corinne has a lot to deal with in that house! I like the story premise.
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Anonymous said...

Okay, now that is seriously creepy! I don't know if I would have braved the hot door. And I definitely would not be going in that basement! Great snippet. :-)

Veronica Scott said...

Oh wow, this is all as ominous as it can possibly be! Stephen King couldn't have set it up better...on edge for the next snippet - today's was GREAT.

Lauren Shiro said...

Thank you all for your comments! I'm glad I was able to spook you a good way! :)

I do need to get better at picking my 8s and making sure that they are 8. I've been going more for content; which is not bad, but I just need to make sure it's 8 and not something else. ;)

Sue Ann Bowling said...

I'd have called 911 at the heat.

Anonymous said...

Darkness like smoke and a burning hot latch? This has the feel of something supernatural and strange. It's probably not safe to go into the basement! (Not that it ever is, really. There be serial killers, corpses, and monsters!)